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Countyside Water Gardens - :30/Oct 2005

Discover tranquility at Countryside Water Gardens in Needville. From large waterfalls racing through boulders to serene ponds stocked with koi and gurgling patio sized container gardens - Countryside Water Gardens are the experts.

Find inspiration for your own yard, and while you're there, browse the front porch sale where you'll find 50% of scratch and dent pottery and 40% off free standing fountains.

Be sure to ask about the hottest new addition to your yard - garden railroads, available at Countryside Water Gardens. Visit them online at countrysidewatergardens.com and on highway 36 in Needville.

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Countryside Water Gardens - :30/OCT 2005

Discover Countryside Water Gardens down the road in Needville. Your complete water garden source with expert personal help and friendly service.

If you want large waterfalls racing through boulders, to serene ponds stocked with koi or patio sized container gardens - the folks at Countryside would love to help you with your water garden plans.

This month while you're there, browse the October Front Porch Sale for 50% off scratch-n-dent pottery and 40% off free standing fountains. Visit their great gift shop for early holiday shopping.

See them online at countrysidewatergardens.com and on Highway 36 in Needville.